KNOWLEDGE BEYOND MISTAKES: A Critique Paper

KNOWLEDGE BEYOND MISTAKES

            In writing an academic written text, the writer must follow the properties. Ideas are the focal point of writing and these are the heart of the message, the content of the piece, and the main theme, together with the details that enrich and develop that they should be developed when a clear statement of purpose is present, position, facts, examples, specific details, definitions, explanation, justifications, or opposing viewpoints and must be logically arranged. The conversation is structured. The level of formality of the text is measured through the language use and choice of words which means you have to use appropriate words and vocabulary usage. A lot of things are necessary to be considered in this property like avoiding redundancies, falutin words, sexist language, excessive use of it's and there, and being consistent with the pronouns and after,  sentence fluency is being achieved. Sentence fluency includes appropriate sentence structure and correct subject-verb agreement. Voice is the magic and the wit, along with the feeling and conviction of the individual writer coming out through the words. The point of view must be also consistent in writing. You must only stick to one point of view. Also, spelling, grammar, capitalization, punctuation, and abbreviation must be observed.

            The essays entitled Happy Introvert and Cell Phone Use And Cancer Risk violate some properties of a well-written text. In Happy Introvert, the ideas are based on the speaker's experiences and not facts. The purpose of the text is not given clearly, and details are not organized. Although there are explanations stated still, the ideas are not logically arranged, and other statements are irrelevant to the previous one and not concise. The content of the text is mostly subjective. Most errors in the text deal with language use and word choice because there are a lot of things that needed to be considered. A lot of grammatical error is found. English is not used standardly and inappropriate level of formality. The speaker usually uses exclamation points which is not acceptable in academic writing and usually uses conversational words like "or whatever", "Honestly" or most likely, expressing the speaker's emotions which is not accurate to do in this type of text. The subject-verb agreement is also not properly observed. For example, "I learned" is wrong because "have" must be added. The text is also not consistent with the pronouns that are being used. At first, the speaker uses "I" while in the middle of the text, the speaker suddenly shifts "I" into "you".

            Next to be criticized will be the second essay which is Cell Phone And Cancer Risk. Unlike the previous text, the ideas are better compared to the first one. The ideas are objective, state facts, and there are justifications for what the speaker is trying to convey. The purpose is clearly shown which is the investigation of cellular phones and their risk of cancer. However, there are still lapses in organizing the ideas. Some statements are quite irrelevant to the main topic. The text is using standard English and meets the level of formality. No conversational words and no use of exclamation points unlike Happy Introvert but still, there are lapses and these will be mentioned later on. The point of view of this text is consistent but the subject is repeatedly mentioned and is not replaced with pronouns throughout which is wrong. Repeating the noun sounds irritating. In terms of mechanics, some punctuations are not placed correctly. Using also of an ellipse is inappropriate.

            Lastly, the similarities of the two are the excessive use of it and there. In the first essay, it is excessively used and usually starts at the beginning of the sentence which is wrong, and in the second essay, repeating it or there is not actually the issue. The one which is repeated in the phrase "stated that" is quite annoying and reading these may destruct the readers in understanding the content of your text. Another similar violation is using a conjunction at the beginning of the sentences like "And", "So", "But", "For" and alike. Starting the sentence with a conjunction is inappropriate which violates the rule in Language Use and Choice of words. Redundancy is also a big violation the two essays have. "I'm in a new house in a new neighborhood."   Simply means, the persona moved to a new place but just saying "I'm in a new house." can be easily understood by the readers.  Another example is "based on  limited evidence from human studies,  limited evidence from studies of  radiofrequency energy and cancer in  rodents, and inconsistent evidence .from mechanistic studies."   This may be rephrased as "based on limited evidence from human studies, radiofrequency energy, and cancer in rodents, inconsistent evidence from mechanistic studies".  Make it concise to be easy to understand and make no confusion while reading the text.

In writing an academic text, following the rules can make the text better than what you expected. Academic text is important because this is a way of practicing one's own writing skills and expanding or developing a person's intellectual mind. Academic text is one way of testing person how they evaluate, analyze, and think critically.

            To prevent committing mistakes, you have to widen first your vocabulary and sentence structure to write academic text without difficulty. Try to go to a place wherein no one can disturb you and you can analyze things that you're witnessing. In such a way, you will be able to practice constructing ideas and put these into sentences and you will be able to use your mind logically and critically of thinking. Watching English movies and reading English novels are also practices to improve one's own capability in constructing statements.

            To end this critique paper, there is one quote that states, "It is a good exercise to practice for examination and for career opportunities where writing skills matter a lot. Writing skills are important in all fields and therefore writing essays helps in quality writing"  (Gaining).